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Too tired to sleep
bird kiss bastard chase
a real hero
stuck inside a human being
memphis blues again
bejesused
buried in your body
nervous system flesh baptism
innocent hotel
standing at the top step
leaning back and
getting payed somehow in
highland wine
halos over every noise you make -
pennies pressed in Ålesund -
the chance to see your face forgetting death
for Alyssa
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grind-the-rust Jun 18, 2013   General Artist
Great rhythm. ... especially "standing at the top step" - such a percussive little bunch of words. Love the phrase
"a real hero
stuck inside a human being"... and those flashing, streaming images again - your poems read the way the city does through the rainwashed glass of a cab window - all flowing and fragmented and lit up.
I like the feel of this one, there's something warm, or hopeful, or intimate, even if lost, that flashes through it.
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brain-tree Jun 19, 2013   General Artist
Thank you so much, that's kind of you to say. Your description of my style makes me joyful, that's a beautiful image to be placed next to.
And thank you for having realized the deeper intent I had while writing this, that means the world to someone who thinks as abstractly as I do.
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webmasterseb Jun 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Great title. Can't quite understand the poem, but I think I get the main idea.
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